Laksmi,you intended to write 'I would appreciate any information..' instead of' I would appreciate my information',right? Moreover, I think it should be' I want to order many...' instead of 'I want to many order'. In other hand,it is enough if you use 'I am' in your fist sentence once.
okey guys thanks. this is my 2nd post after you give me feed back. I forget to change it in new page. I lost my first page and this is my post that clear.
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ReplyDeleteLaksmi,you intended to write 'I would appreciate any information..' instead of' I would appreciate my information',right?
ReplyDeleteMoreover, I think it should be' I want to order many...' instead of 'I want to many order'.
In other hand,it is enough if you use 'I am' in your fist sentence once.
Laksmi, i'm agree with shofi, you should write " I want to order many ...." instead of " I want to many order"
ReplyDeleteLaksmi, it's a good latter. Maybe will be better if you add an coma "," after you write "sincerely".
ReplyDeleteokey guys thanks. this is my 2nd post after you give me feed back. I forget to change it in new page. I lost my first page and this is my post that clear.
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